Verse 51852aa))enah bane
G5
In this meter the first long syllable may be replaced by a short; and the next-to-last long syllable may be replaced by two shorts.
1
may evil/bad come upon this delicacy! if she's kind/good, then so what?
2
if she would come to hand, then a hand couldn't be laid upon her!
| References | |
|---|---|
| Arshi, Imtiyaz Ali | Ghazal# 226 |
| Raza, Kalidas Gupta | 429-30 |
| Hamid Ali Khan | Open Image |
Composing this verse, the author has shown a picture of delicacy. There's no doubt at all that the word is wrong, because is a Persian word, and he has made its abstract form according to the Arabic pattern. But the Urdu users blindly follow the Persian elders in doing this; thus in Urdu too from they've made , and from , ; and the idiom, and the usage of elders, have made all these words correct. (215)
== Nazm page 215
He says, 'Her utter delicacy has left her incapable of this-- so that if she would fall into the hands of any ardent lover, then no ardent lover would be able to succeed in obtaining union'. (274)
She has a good temperament, but she's so delicate that no longing can be fulfilled. Even if she would be obtained, then through fear of her delicacy nothing would be able to be achieved. He's said it in such a way that the beloved's imagined picture begins to pass before the eyes.
[Disapproving of Nazm's attitude:] The usage of elders and the entry into the idiom is itself an absolute proof of a word's eloquence []. The elders of Iran kept an eye on the scope of their language, and proved themselves to be renewers. They never failed to use this [ability], although there wasn't as much necessity for creating words in Persian as there is in Urdu. But what cure is there-- the worthy commentator is bemoaning this! And he considers it necessary to make the language dead, and to narrow the circle of its scope! (375)
A verse of Sayyid Insha 's too on this theme is worthy of comparison:
[look at the delicacy of that attractive rose, oh Insha
if the dawn breeze would touch it, the color would be soiled] (316)
Arshi, who usually doesn't give many diacritics, provides a that marks the first word of the verse as rather than . In this case, it doesn't seem to make much difference.
On the idiomatic grammar of expressions, see 191,8 .
Ghalib naturally doesn't expect us to subsist for more than one verse without wordplay-- in contrast to the prosy 191,4 , this one offers us good/bad in the first line, and also in the second line the two even more enjoyably different idiomatic uses of , which I've tried to capture through more or less similar English expressions.
In this verse, the beloved's extreme delicacy seems to be a kind of sadistic cosmic joke on the lover, for which the beloved is blameless; if anything, she is (or at least might be) 'kind', rather than complicit in such cruelty to the hapless lover. Compare 20,3 , in which the same delicacy is the basis of a teasing bit of repartee directed at the beloved herself-- it's made to call into question not only her physical strength, but also her moral fiber.
Compare also Mir 's more vivid and sensuous take on the untouchable delicacy of the beloved: M 759,5 . And even more appropriately, Mir's equal show of exasperation at the situation: M 1457,3 .
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