Verse 41855aa))ii
G8
In this meter the first long syllable may be replaced by a short; and the next-to-last long syllable may be replaced by two shorts.
1
when the greenery didn't get space anywhere
2
it became scum/moss on the face of the water
'Green scum on stagnant water, water-moss'.
| References | |
|---|---|
| Arshi, Imtiyaz Ali | Ghazal# 232 |
| Raza, Kalidas Gupta | 459-60 |
| Hamid Ali Khan | Open Image |
He says, 'Greenery was begotten to such an extent that it covered the whole earth, and now when no space on earth remained for its growth, then out of necessity it began to manifest itself in the form of scum on the water'. (263)
There occurred such an abundance of greenery that when no space any longer remained on earth, then it became scum on the water. (360)
That is, on the whole earth there was nothing but greenery and more greenery, but the movement of growth didn't come to an end. The new greenery, having been unsuccessful in its search for space, congealed as scum on the surface of the water. (306)
[See his comments on Mir's M 1041,8 .]
This whole ghazal has an unusual degree of internal coherence; for discussion, see 181,1 .
This verse seems to presuppose the previous verses, not logically-- since it's grammatically complete-- but semantically, since the questions of what greenery we're talking about, and why it would need extra space, and why that fact is worth mentioning, can only be answered with reference to the ghazal as a whole.
Here's an attempt to turn the repellent-- the smelly, oozy green scum that congeals on stagnant water-- into something charming: an essence of greenness, a verdant force of spring that is bound to burst out everywhere and in all forms. Does this movement of anti-grotesquerie succeed? (Or rather, in a verse as slight as this one, does the question even matter?)
Perhaps the deserves some ' fresh-word ' credit; this is its only appearance in the divan .
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